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The selected essay type is “IELTS Outweigh Essay,” but the actual essay question requires a “Discussion” essay. The prompt asks you to discuss both views and give your own opinion, not to state which side outweighs the other. Choosing the wrong essay type can negatively impact your Task Response score, especially if you do not give balanced consideration to both perspectives as required in a Discussion essay.
| Error Type | Original Text | Corrected Version | Explanation | IELTS Impact |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Articles | stay in one company for all their life | stay in a company for all their life | The article “a” is needed because we are talking about any one company, not a specific one. | Missing articles can limit you to Band 6 or below. |
| Articles | it feels more safe and stable | it feels safer and more stable | Comparative adjectives (“safer”) are needed, and “more” is not used with “safe” in this case. | Incorrect grammar reduces clarity and can lower your score. |
| Articles | change job often | change jobs often | “Jobs” should be plural and no article is needed in this structure. “Change job” is incorrect. | Article and noun form errors can affect Band 7 or higher. |
| Articles | at early stage of your career | at an early stage of your career | “An” is needed before “early stage” because we refer to one of many possible stages, not a specific one. | Omitting articles here is a common mistake that limits scores. |
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Day 1: Articles
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Task: Write a short paragraph describing your favorite book, making sure to use appropriate articles (a, an, the) throughout the text.
Tip: Pay special attention to when to use “the” for specific items versus “a” or “an” for general references. Practice by identifying mistakes in articles in sample sentences.
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✍️ Suggested Essay Rewrite (Band 7.5)
Some people like to stay in one company for all their life because it feels more safe and stable. They know their team, their boss, and how things work. Also, some companies give promotions or pensions to loyal workers, so they think it is a good idea.
Explanation: Added “one” before “company” to specify a particular company, and used plurals for “promotions” and “pensions” to indicate possibilities.
On the other hand, some people prefer to change jobs often. They can learn new skills, meet new people, and get more money. Changing jobs can also help to avoid boredom. In my opinion, it is better to try different jobs when you are young to find what you really like. Then later, you can stay in one job if you want to.
Explanation: Changed “job” to “jobs” to align with the plural subjects, implying that the change involves multiple positions.
In conclusion, both ways have benefits, but I think changing jobs is more useful, especially at the early stage of your career.
Explanation: Used “benefits” to match the plural context and added “the” before “early stage” to specify a particular stage in a career trajectory.
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